No, I'm not upset. When I was writing it I thought of it like this though.

blessed with rhythm/just like a schism when I would write...

Anyways, I am going to take what you guys said into consideration and re-write it.

That's why I posted here, to see if it made sense and if it doesn't then I need to make some changes. I don't care if it's good or bad or not your cup of tea. I just like to share what I've done with folks and it's all love from this side of the table! :)

Take care and keep the constructive criticism coming please.